Tine ([info]perverteerno1) wrote in [info]snape_potter,
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Just a Bit of Pressure

Author: Tine
Title: Just a Bit of Pressure (1/1)
Pairing: Snarry (Snape/Harry)
Rating: R
Spoilers: 3rd Book (PoA)
Warning: Chan, underage, Harry is 13 here, don't read if it squicks you;
slight squicky content (see summary)
Disclaimer: not mine ;__;
All characters you recognize belong to JK Rowling, various publishers including but not limited to Bloomsbury Books, Scholastic Books and Raincoast Books, and Warner Bros., Inc. No money is being made and no copyright or trademark infringement is intended.
Beta: [info]escapisms (thx for that *smooch*)
Summary: Harry needs to use the toilet, Snape has to keep him company...
Author's Note: HUGE thx to [info]escapisms to help me write this fic <333


Just a Bit of Pressure

The hard ground beneath his back and the steady, sleep-implied breathing of hundreds of students are the first things he is aware of. Thoughts begin swirling in his mind, pictures, impressions, memories; the torn painting of the Fat Lady, Dumbledore ordering the students to spend the night in the Great Hall, hurried whispers and worried glances between the teachers.

The sound of the front doors opening, invades his ears. Footsteps echo slightly and the swishing sound of heavy fabrics is audible. Slowly he turns onto his stomach and cautiously takes a look around the Hall. Snape has entered and moves towards Percy, his black robes billowing behind him. Almost like a shadow, Harry thinks and continues to watch him.

Percy is walking through the rows of students, stopping here and there to glance over at his girlfriend Penelope Clearwater, who seems to be keeping watch as well.

Snape suddenly stops moving and stands still, statue-like, his back ramrod straight. He holds this pose for a moment, and then starts moving towards the back entrance of the Hall. Percy attempts to speak to him, but is ignored.

Harry lets his head fall back onto the pillow, trying to catch another hour or two of sleep. He closes his eyes; Snape's footsteps fade into the background. Slowly he dozes off, his mind turning to fuzzy cotton, thoughts drifting into a comforting nothingness.

A sudden sharp pain jerks him back to awareness, letting him know with ruthless stabs, just how full his bladder is. Carefully he rises, his limbs not fully under his control yet, but determined to get to the toilet as fast as possible without making a fool of himself.

He reaches the door and just as he puts his hand on the handle, a deep voice next to his right ear stops him dead in his tracks.

"Just where do you think you are going, Potter?" Snape is standing so close that he can feel his breath ghost over his ear and cheek.

"I have to use the toilet, Professor." Harry tries to hide the annoyance in his voice.

"Surely even you should realize that no student is allowed outside of this hall alone, tonight." Snape sneers at him.

"I'll ask Percy then, to..." he is cut off by Snape: "I will accompany you, Potter. Just to make sure you aren't up to something. Now move along, will you?" With that last sentence he is pushed out into the corridor.

He's more than a little uncomfortable walking down the hallway knowing that Snape is directly behind him; so close that he can practically feel Snape's swishing robes against his heels. He doesn't understand why Percy couldn't have come with him; at least Percy was someone he could almost stand. But really he didn't understand why he couldn't go by himself. He was more than capable of taking care of himself as he'd shown on more than one occasion. He certainly didn't need Snape tailing him like he was a puppy going outside. It was very, very unfair.

Harry pushes the door to the lavatory open. It is dimly lit by candles and appears shadowy and old in the flickering twilight. He is surprised when Snape follows him in. "Um. Sir, could you wait outside, please?"

"I think not Potter." Snape states with a sneer, "Sirius Black could very well be hiding in there and it is my duty as a teacher not to leave a student alone outside the Great Hall, not for a second, do you understand me?"

Not leaving him the slightest chance of answering, Snape continues: "Now go and finish it already, this is certainly not a way I want to spend my evening." With those last words Harry is pushed towards one of the toilets hanging on the wall.

Awkwardly, Harry walks over to the urinal farthest from the door. Watching Snape out of the corner of his eye, he unzips his trousers and fishes his penis out of his pants. Swallowing nervously, he closes his eyes and tries to will his bladder to empty but it refuses. Not even a drop splashes into the urinal. Mortified, Harry shifts so his back is to Snape and shakes it, hoping that maybe that will stimulate the flow. He lets out a little frantic squeak when nothing happens.

Glancing over his shoulder, he sees Snape leaning against the wall next to the door, his arms crossed over the chest. Apparently he's looking anywhere but at him. Harry turns his head away and tries to will his bladder to just let go.

"For god's sake Potter, if you didn't have to use the toilet so urgently, then why did you pester me at all?" Snape sounds angry and very annoyed.

Harry closes his eyes, fighting back tears of frustration. "I do!" He insists urgently and his need to pee is quickly overshadowed by how embarrassed he is. Even his bladder is defunct when Snape is around. He peers over his shoulder again, his face bright red.

"Damn you, Potter. Even in a bathroom you can't be expected to show any effort!"
A rustle of clothing and Snape his behind him, leaving him no time to react. He leans over, putting his hand on Harry's lower belly and presses. Harry squeaks and stops breathing for a moment.

"Sir? What are you doing?" He makes an attempt to bat Snape's hand away. He is ignored and the pressure increases. He thinks that maybe he should scream because this is surely not something the Headmaster would allow but before he can open his mouth to shout, it feels like something inside him pops as he finally pees. With a sigh, he sags against Snape's back.

When the stream finally ends, Harry opens his eyes slowly and yawns wide. He's suddenly very tired and Snape is warm against his back. And Snape's hand is around his penis.

Harry had let go of it in shock, when pressure was applied to his bladder. Snape must have grabbed it to keep Harry from pissing on himself.

He takes a moment to look down. Snape's hand is huge around him but he's a little more interested than he thinks he should be. He stares up at Snape and blinks carefully, not really sure what to do. He feels warm all over. Snape avoids his gaze and gives the penis in his hand a little shake to get rid of remaining drops of urine then stops cold, as if petrified. The penis starts to harden.

Harry blushes bright red and stammers, "We should go back to the Great Hall." It's wrong to be here. Very, very wrong and he doesn't like that a large part of him doesn't care. But before he can push away and zip up, he shifts his hips and gasps when Snape's hand strokes over him.

"Oh," he whispers, eyes wide. Slowly Snape continues stroking him, making him feel warm and fuzzy. He bites his lip as he feels Snape's erection poke him in the back. He swallows thickly and can't help arching his back towards it as his own penis swells further, easily dwarfed by Snape's hand.

Snape groans somewhere above him and he really likes the sound coming from the man.
Harry is not sure what's come over him but he can't think straight and his head is full of heat. He wants. He just isn't sure what he wants.

Suddenly he feels Snape licking along his earlobe, tracing its outline with the tip of his tongue. It's sucked into Snape's mouth, then seemingly cool air is breathed over the wet skin. Steadily Snape keeps on stroking, gentle with a slight twist at the end.

Harry groans and pushes his hips forward. He's practically panting, his head thrown back. It feels like with every pull his insides are being pulled out. The stroking is getting faster, the twist getting harder and Harry is panting, writhing and moaning, wanting more, wanting it even faster, wanting it even harder and Snape gives it to him. Snape is panting in his ear, still licking and biting it.

Harry can feel it building, a pressure in his groin, growing bigger. He closes his eyes again, stars exploding behind his eyelids, his whole body shaking, knees bucking. "Professor!" The deep moan forces it's way out of his mouth before he can stop it.

The following moments pass in a blur. The toilet is flushed, his pants zipped back up. He's ushered out of the door before he notices anything but the low throbbing in his balls.
At the doors of the Great Hall Snape faces him, white as a sheet, wand in hand. The whispered "Obliviate" is barely heard.

The hard ground beneath his back and the steady, sleep-implied breathing of hundreds of students are the first things he is aware of. Thoughts begin swirling in his mind, pictures, impressions, memories; the torn painting of the Fat Lady, Dumbledore ordering the students to spend the night in the Great Hall, hurried whispers and worried glances between the teachers; Snape bringing him to the toilet, thankfully waiting outside, and bringing him back to the Hall.

The sound of the front doors opening invades his ears. Footsteps echo slightly and the swishing sound of fabric can be heard. Slowly he turns onto his stomach and cautiously takes a look around the hall. Dumbledore has entered. It is morning and the students can return to their Common Rooms.

The End


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[info]perverteerno1

June 27 2004, 04:48:39 UTC 7 years ago

Re: Wow

I'm sorry that you didn't like the ending. Clearly this story can't please everyone, but that wasn't my intend to begin with. I wrote it like that because it seemed like a fitting ending, and I quite like it.
I'm very thankful for your feedback though ^^

[info]splitpea

June 24 2004, 16:09:53 UTC 7 years ago

Corrections and Comments

"towards" should be "toward". Although people pronounce it that way, sometimes, "toward" never has an "s" on it.
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The Obliviate at the end, although smart of Snape, kind of makes the fic weaker, to me. It's like in other stories were at the end the character realizes it was all a dream. It means that the events in the fiction have no real effect on the character.
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I think the overall "pee" idea was very new and very creative. I like it. I also like the image of Snape hovering over Harry and pressing his lower-belly. Very interesting.
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The fact that it's in present tense kept making me feel weird in a bad way, but it's not a bad thing. It's... not usually done, but that doesn't make it bad. Past tense is just my personal preference.
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Overall:

Good story with few grammatical errors and a new way of getting our favorite pairing to play. I, personally, would rethink the obliviate at the end, but it's not neccessary.
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Good job!

[info]perverteerno1

June 27 2004, 04:58:49 UTC 7 years ago

Re: Corrections and Comments

1. Thanks for the correction ^^
2. The ending seemed fitting for me. Of course not everyone shares my point of view. The world would be boring as hell if everyone did. I'm sorry you didn't like it, but I'm not going to change it ^^
3. Thank you. I actually dreamed this >.>
uhm... yeah... let's carry on...
4. I wrote it in present tense for a reason. If I had written the story in past tense, there wouldn't be a story to begin with. Harry's mind has been altered at the end, so he clearly wouldn't remember what really happened in the lavatory, therefor I wrote the story in present tense, just as it happened.
My way of thinking might be weird, but it makes sense to me ^^'''

Overall:
Thank you very much. Constructive criticism isn't something you get everyday. I'm glad that all in all you liked the story and I think that's the important thing.
As I said above, I'm not going to change the ending, as I like it quite a lot.

*bows*

[info]splitpea

7 years ago

[info]wildfyre

6 years ago

[info]vain_chan

June 24 2004, 20:09:11 UTC 7 years ago

Excellent story. Perfect use of Obliviate. Unique premise. Didn't like the present tense in 3rd person POV, but that's entirely the author's perogative. Everyone else already covered anything else I might have said. All in all, my hat's off to you.

- Hanakai

[info]perverteerno1

June 27 2004, 05:00:27 UTC 7 years ago

*bows*
Thank you very much for that lovely feedback.
As for the time, I wrote it in present tense for a reason. If I had written the story in past tense, there wouldn't be a story to begin with. Harry's mind has been altered at the end, so he clearly wouldn't remember what really happened in the lavatory, therefor I wrote the story in present tense, just as it happened.
My way of thinking might be weird, but it makes sense to me ^^'''

[info]leelee_potter

June 24 2004, 21:00:55 UTC 7 years ago

I always enjoy a fic where Snape indulges himself.

[info]perverteerno1

June 27 2004, 05:00:53 UTC 7 years ago

*bows*
I'm glad it was to your liking ^^

[info]slave2shinigami

June 25 2004, 02:27:44 UTC 7 years ago

That's the best use of "obliviate" I've seen yet! Wicked awesome job. Severus, Severus, you naughty thing. *grins madly*

[info]perverteerno1

June 27 2004, 05:01:47 UTC 7 years ago

Naughty indeed ^^'
Thank you for that lovely feedback.
I'm blushing like mad ^^'''

[info]rabidfrog

June 27 2004, 14:41:06 UTC 7 years ago

I quite liked this story, very original...though the Obliviate did slightly depress me, its probably what would have happened...everything was very in character...good job :)

[info]platoapproved

July 28 2004, 22:55:38 UTC 7 years ago

Nice. The writing was ... alright, the premise nothing terribly original, but I still enjoyed it. The repition of the beginning lines at the end was a nice touch.

[info]iamravine

July 29 2004, 21:52:27 UTC 7 years ago

Poor Harry, now he can't even get to remember pleasure.

That was terrific!!!!

[info]stellarodyssey

August 5 2004, 05:39:44 UTC 7 years ago

I got here following the link from trevelyan_s story "Unexpected" and I wasn't disappointed with this story. Snape's dialog was definitely in character, it's exactly what I would have expected him to say. Too bad about the Obliviate spell though :(

Anonymous

June 9 2005, 17:21:33 UTC 6 years ago

Nicely done!

I thought that this fic was really well done. Although it hadn't really occured to me as I read it, your explanation of the present tense was very clever and I really appreciated that element as I reread it.

I am in the "I like the oblivate" camp, because it allows it to reconnect with canon. If that had really happened to Harry and he remembered it, then he would be effected by it. This ending makes it easier to imagaine that this is a little piece of canon that got erased from his mind.

One thing you might consider though, is Snape's initial motivation. Did he insist on taking Harry to the bathroom to get him alone and have his wicked way with him? His response to the whole thing made it seem (to me) that it was very spontaneous and that he actually felt badly or at least panicked by it. Just a thought...

Well done! -- CatsEye

Anonymous

June 13 2005, 05:32:43 UTC 6 years ago

Koolage

That was great. ^^ I really liked it. ^^

Anonymous

February 2 2006, 23:15:34 UTC 6 years ago

You guys are rude...

I'm just posting to show that there is someone out there that likes the story "as is" and thinks that if the reader doesn't like some aspect that relates to tone or style they should keep it to themselves and get over it. Writers don't need to hear about your feelings on whether the Obliviate spell is mean or how writings in present tense aren't your personal preference. It's nice to get feedback, but it's nicer to get feedback about the story you've written. I happen to think that this story was great from beginning to end. Thank you, Perverteerno1, for sharing your story with us.

[info]perverteerno1

February 3 2006, 04:56:58 UTC 6 years ago

Re: You guys are rude...

thank you for your kind feedback
I'm glad you liked it. You're right that it is indeed nicer to hear that your story is liked all the way, but I also think that everyone should be allowed to voice their oppinion and I'm glad that people do... it would be a terribly boring world where everyone has the same taste and oppinion

[info]free_the_goats

March 8 2006, 04:54:44 UTC 6 years ago

I LOVE this story. I especially like that the whole thing was really accidental, that is, no calculated stunt on Snape's part, like these stories usually are.

Is there more? I doubt it, but I'd be all fangirly and happy if there was.

[info]effie_chan

June 26 2008, 02:25:33 UTC 3 years ago

You know, I read this story when you first posted it and I realised I hadn't commented yet, so here goes:

I love how you show Snape's character through Harry's point of view. He seems to be pretty freaked out about what he has done to Harry there at the end. Probably why he Obliviated him. That and, of course, he doesn't want to be found out.

Like many readers above I'm a bit disappointed about the Obliviate. It means there will be no consequences for Harry. I do concede, however, that it does make sense. I do feel better knowing that at least Snape remembers what he has done and that he has to deal with his conscience (what little there is of it) even if there will be no other consequences for him.

Very well done. And very hot. ;)

[info]perverteerno1

June 26 2008, 06:34:59 UTC 3 years ago


well after 4 years I can cleary say that I have no idea why I wrote this story *lol*
but thank you for reading :)

[info]aalens

June 26 2008, 05:35:10 UTC 3 years ago

I enjoyed this story greatly. While reading it I found the present tense seemed rather awkward however on reading on one of your comments why you wrote it that way I realised your thought processes are more clever than mine could ever be.LOL
Congratualtions on writing such an enjoyable story.
BTW I went to your profile to see if I could find other HP fics by you but could find nothing. Are there any and if so could you provide the URLs for them please?

[info]perverteerno1

June 26 2008, 06:40:47 UTC 3 years ago

well I wouldn't say clever... complicated or crazy might work better in that regard... anyway thank you for reading and commenting!
Sorry, but there are no other fics... I'm actually not that much of a writer, so I don't even know why I wrote this is the first place...
You're lucky that this is still up, as I planned on taking this story down, specially with the new LJ policy and all.
thanks again!

[info]aalens

3 years ago

[info]honilee

June 28 2008, 03:06:16 UTC 3 years ago

Just a Bit of Pressure

Here via snarryficfind.

I was mostly curious about how you would handle the subject matter when I began reading, but in the end I must say that I really enjoyed this story a lot!

I especially liked the ending; Harry has no idea what happened and life continues on normally for him, but what about Snape? How will he deal with his actions? How many other times has he Obliviated Harry before? Will he do so again?

I love stories like this that stay canon while making me ask questions like this. Thank you for sharing. :)

[info]under_neat

January 24 2010, 18:09:53 UTC 2 years ago

Wow, that was amazing! The characterization was spot on, and it made the fic all the more realistic. I really liked the ending since it brought the fic back to canon, giving the fic sort of creepy undertones. Makes me wonder how the scenario affected Snape, and whether anything similar happened in later years (Snape's reaction at the hall doors indicated this was the first time, after all :) Overall, great writing. I really enjoyed it.
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